關於鼓勵人們多穿傳統服裝的雅思學生習作修改

注：一篇學生的習作，裏面出現的問題，尤其是首段出現的問題很值得各位雅思學員注意。

希望大家看完原文的'開頭之後，應該思考我們課堂上所講的雅思作文開頭的背景交代的改寫方法。

Topic: In many countries people no longer wear their national costumes. They are forgetting their history and traditions, more people should be encouraged to wear their national costumes everyday. Do you agree or disagree.

原文：

In this day and age, as a pace of social development, a various kinds of clothes are winning tremendous popularity in some countries. But in the meantime, it has drawn a great deal of attention to the problem that whether more people should be encouraged to wear national clothes everyday. As far as I am concerned, people should not wear them per day.

In the first place, it is generally acknowledge that traditional clothes of some countries are unconvenient for national residents to work. It is a fact that some of their costumes, such as kimono of Japan,cheongsam of china and Korea-style cothes, they are too long and big to work. In particular policemen and doctors,these careers are hard to be done if they are wearing such clothes.

In the second place, not wearing national costumes doesnot mean their citizens forgetting their history and traditions. Some countries history and traditions are still studied by young children. Take Japanese as an example, they always knee down when they are eating meals.